FabSwingers.com forum: Profile edit

By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please?

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please? "

I think it reads well. Good amount of detail,straight forward and explains what you want.

I like it.

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

Thank you! Really appreciate the feedback

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By *ady LickWoman
over a year ago

Northampton Somewhere

I think it's good but slightly negative in places, but that's not a bad thing assuming that people will read it!

I think it's about the right length but it'll still be too long for some

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Thank you! Really appreciate the feedback

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and if you had deleted the second to last line I would have messaged

But I can read so good luck

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please? "

Have you informed the press about your new profile? I'm sure the general public are interested to know what new twist you've put on it

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By *uagga79Man
over a year ago

I think you have to be blunt in some cases otherwise it invites some undesirables. Personality can come across as you exchange messages but your profile does come across as someone who knows what they want and isn’t going to suffer fools gladly.

Lastly though you at least give guidance on how to try to engage with you and that really is the key part as it sets it out pretty clearly and also helps out the chaff who just ignore it.

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"I think it's good but slightly negative in places, but that's not a bad thing assuming that people will read it!

I think it's about the right length but it'll still be too long for some

You're telling me.

Out of interest, which bits read as slightly negative to you?

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Thank you! Really appreciate the feedback

and if you had deleted the second to last line I would have messaged

But I can read so good luck

Ah, that does suck. If things ever change...

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"I think you have to be blunt in some cases otherwise it invites some undesirables. Personality can come across as you exchange messages but your profile does come across as someone who knows what they want and isn’t going to suffer fools gladly.

Lastly though you at least give guidance on how to try to engage with you and that really is the key part as it sets it out pretty clearly and also helps out the chaff who just ignore it. "

Very good points. Thank you.

I give a step by step guide on how to interact with me, or do you not thing that suffices?

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please? "

hmm it was interesting, giant turtles and stuff...

ok..I lied, I just perved the tasty pics

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By *uagga79Man
over a year ago

Some need a guide and as someone else said plenty won’t even bother reading the profile anyway.

It’s good to give a bit of advice though as sometimes it can be difficult trying to engage with someone as well

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please?

hmm it was interesting, giant turtles and stuff...

ok..I lied, I just perved the tasty pics

That's okay. I just perved you back. :P

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Some need a guide and as someone else said plenty won’t even bother reading the profile anyway.

It’s good to give a bit of advice though as sometimes it can be difficult trying to engage with someone as well "

Yes, that's fair, but I'm not sure how much more advice I could give on how to interact with me.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please?

hmm it was interesting, giant turtles and stuff...

ok..I lied, I just perved the tasty pics

That's okay. I just perved you back. :P "

haha...I seen and gave a slight slabber

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By *HaRiFMan
over a year ago

Beyond the shadows.

As profiles go its quite good. I see the knitting and crochet drawing a lot of people in

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"As profiles go its quite good. I see the knitting and crochet drawing a lot of people in

Haha, you reckon? XD

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please? "

Its ok but its very cold and clinical.

You say you want more than a "hi" but youve given me nothing about your personality with which to make something more.

The list of likes is sort of generic its what everyone likes. I tend to find one of your more unusual tastes gets better attention.

Im saying this from the perspective of a single.male.were we need to out in "hooks" for people to read and then can very easily use to write us a message.

As a single attractive woman youll get messages regardles but the same things may help you get a more in tune guy to message you who doesnt wsnt to write something generic as his hello but csnt think of what to write

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Some need a guide and as someone else said plenty won’t even bother reading the profile anyway.

It’s good to give a bit of advice though as sometimes it can be difficult trying to engage with someone as well

Yes, that's fair, but I'm not sure how much more advice I could give on how to interact with me. "

I wouldn't give any advice. The ones who are right for you won't need it.

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please?

Its ok but its very cold and clinical.

You say you want more than a "hi" but youve given me nothing about your personality with which to make something more.

The list of likes is sort of generic its what everyone likes. I tend to find one of your more unusual tastes gets better attention.

Im saying this from the perspective of a single.male.were we need to out in "hooks" for people to read and then can very easily use to write us a message.

Thank you for your honesty. Really appreciate what you said about my likes in particular, you're right. I'll work on that for sure.

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By *HaRiFMan
over a year ago

Beyond the shadows.

"As profiles go its quite good. I see the knitting and crochet drawing a lot of people in

Haha, you reckon? XD "

Definitely, sparked my interest straight away. I was rubbing my knees gleeful until I got to the only sub males need apply part

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"As profiles go its quite good. I see the knitting and crochet drawing a lot of people in

Haha, you reckon? XD

Definitely, sparked my interest straight away. I was rubbing my knees gleeful until I got to the only sub males need apply part

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You've got that mixed up :P

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"As profiles go its quite good. I see the knitting and crochet drawing a lot of people in

Haha, you reckon? XD

Definitely, sparked my interest straight away. I was rubbing my knees gleeful until I got to the only sub males need apply part

Wtong way round dude!

Quick message message!!!!

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By *HaRiFMan
over a year ago

Beyond the shadows.

"As profiles go its quite good. I see the knitting and crochet drawing a lot of people in

Haha, you reckon? XD

Definitely, sparked my interest straight away. I was rubbing my knees gleeful until I got to the only sub males need apply part

You've got that mixed up :P "

Right, ok wait right there. Im off to WH Smiths got get my self some pens, pencils and some nice writing paper. I've got to write out several drafts of the message on paper first so I get it spot on.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"As profiles go its quite good. I see the knitting and crochet drawing a lot of people in

Haha, you reckon? XD

Definitely, sparked my interest straight away. I was rubbing my knees gleeful until I got to the only sub males need apply part

You've got that mixed up :P

Right, ok wait right there. Im off to WH Smiths got get my self some pens, pencils and some nice writing paper. I've got to write out several drafts of the message on paper first so I get it spot on.

Just dont forget to mention great tits, shes a devout ornathologist

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By *ade and VanessaCouple
over a year ago

Central Scotland

We're not your target market but I like it. Long enough to put off those without an attention span and gives plenty of information about you without being a list of what you don't want/require or it's punishment of death for the message

hope it attracts who you're looking for

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Thank you! Really appreciate the feedback

and if you had deleted the second to last line I would have messaged

But I can read so good luck

Ah, that does suck. If things ever change...

*hotlisted*

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Thank you! Really appreciate the feedback

and if you had deleted the second to last line I would have messaged

But I can read so good luck

Ah, that does suck. If things ever change...

*hotlisted*

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By *den-Valley-coupleCouple
over a year ago

Cumbria

Got boring two-thirds down quite negative old pictures..

But your a single girl you can put what ever and the guy's will give it a go...

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

I'd not contact you.

It sounds quite negative to me, but then I've been pushed out by your preferences and views, so it's no biggy for you, I'm sure .

Great photos though.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please? "

I think its an exceptional profile, tells us what we want to know, only fault I can see is your age range,

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Your profile is very well written, quite a rarity on here

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please? "

Looks good to me...looks exactly the same as what I’m looking for...I will have to take pointers from your text, my of is like war n peace

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

It’s a good profile. Leaves no one in doubt about who you are and what you’re looking for.

Ours is also long. We’re a slightly ‘different ‘ couple and we want people to understand what we’re about before they message.

Sadly it doesn’t always work tho!

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By *uicyfruit3Man
over a year ago

portsmouth

"Hey all.

I've rewritten my profile. It was quite long and while it was well formatted, I think it needed to be shortened. I feel like I've lost a lot of my personality from it.

Could I get some feedback on how it reads, please? "

I think that it's a very well written profile. It's not too long, it's well laid out and has a mixture of what your are and aren't looking for. Oh and fantastic pictures too

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Got boring two-thirds down quite negative old pictures..

But your a single girl you can put what ever and the guy's will give it a go..."

Some of my pictures are quite old, yes. I’m not sure what you mean by “boring” and “negative” pictures though. Could you please clarify?

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

It reads well. You get a really good idea of who you are and what you want.

It explains you can be blunt (but also that you have a good sense of humour and are a fundamentally ‘nice’ person) so having a negative or two is perfectly in context.

Maybe end on a positive/encouraging line? Nitpicking but just an idea xx

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Got boring two-thirds down quite negative old pictures..

But your a single girl you can put what ever and the guy's will give it a go...

Some of my pictures are quite old, yes. I’m not sure what you mean by “boring” and “negative” pictures though. Could you please clarify? "

none sucking my cock..now thats boringggggggggggggggggggggggggggg

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By *iss Penny TrationWoman
over a year ago

Took a look, saw how long it was, and decided not to read it. No ones profile is perfect but

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By *iss Penny TrationWoman
over a year ago

I’ll read it now though after my initial opinion lol

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By *iss Penny TrationWoman
over a year ago

Hobbies section seems unnecessary as does a few other things. You sound like hard work but strong willed in that you know what you want. Nice pics. Sorry I’m d*unk. Good luck to you

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By *isa2018Couple
over a year ago

East Northamptonshire

Looks good and clear with a decent selection of pictures. Although I'd normally say hobbies info isn't relevant here on fab, if you are looking for a FWB then it could be in order to establish common interests for non-play friendship.

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