FabSwingers.com forum: how dos our profile look now

By *r. and mis.jay OP Couple
over a year ago

Lancaster

Is the text less selfish and are the pics hot on our page is there any reason why we shouldn't swim lol we made a lot of up dates to our profile

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Unless you have a verruca then you can swim

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By *irty130Couple
over a year ago

Bristol Area

It seems that you're a little short on punctuation.

Here's some spares: ..... ,,,,, !!! ?

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

It looks ok, but could do with a bit more typing, to give an insight more off what kind of persons you are.

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By *enard ArgenteMan
over a year ago

London and France

The total lack of punctuation, sentences, or anything makes the paragraph almost completely unreadable.

It took me 2 minutes to read something that would normally take about 15 seconds.

As a result, as soon as I saw that paragraph I would just click onto the next profile.

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By *nleashedCrakenMan
over a year ago

Widnes

I don't want to come across as a grammar nazi but I found it quite difficult to understand your text because of the complete lack of any CAPITALS or punctuation marks. A few full stops (periods) and maybe a comma or two would really make it come across so much better.

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By *enard ArgenteMan
over a year ago

London and France

"The total lack of punctuation, sentences, or anything makes the paragraph almost completely unreadable.

It took me 2 minutes to read something that would normally take about 15 seconds.

As a result, as soon as I saw that paragraph I would just click onto the next profile."

In fact on the reading, it is complete gibberish: what does " where even just down the chat are even ...."

mean?

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"I don't want to come across as a grammar nazi but I found it quite difficult to understand your text because of the complete lack of any CAPITALS or punctuation marks. A few full stops (periods) and maybe a comma or two would really make it come across so much better.

I'm glad it wasn't any longer or I'd have passed out (that's not the first time I've said that!)

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By *rightonsteveMan
over a year ago

Brighton - even Hove!

There are some good photos and some that don't add anything to your profile. The text could be better written to say more clearly what you're looking for.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Is the text less selfish and are the pics hot on our page is there any reason why we shouldn't swim lol we made a lot of up dates to our profile "

You made updates? What was it like before?

It read like a verse from the Jabberwocky, only it made less sense. My recommendation, for what it is worth, is to use sentences. Stream of conscientious has a place but I would leave that to James Joyce.

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By *rightonsteveMan
over a year ago

Brighton - even Hove!

Looks like you've listened to advice and made changes.

This suggested that you're serious about enjoying a swinging lifestyle, that you're respectful, that you're not up you're own arse, that you're willing to listen to ideas and be open minded. All good qualities.

Good luck and happy swinging

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By *rs DCouple
over a year ago

far

Well done for changing profile wording to good english.happy fabbing all the best

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By *irty130Couple
over a year ago

Bristol Area

Wow! much better guys!

It's nice to see someone listen to advice in the forum here! Good luck x

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By *icecouple561Couple
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over a year ago

East Sussex

Looks good to me. Hope you have a lot of fun .

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By *nleashedCrakenMan
over a year ago

Widnes

Text much improved. I'd go so far as to say the text is now well above average. Well done and good luck.

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By *r. and mis.jay OP Couple
over a year ago

Lancaster

"It seems that you're a little short on punctuation.

Here's some spares: ..... ,,,,, !!! ?

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lol true but not now

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By *r. and mis.jay OP Couple
over a year ago

Lancaster

"Looks like you've listened to advice and made changes.

Good luck and happy swinging

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Thank you

for all the help

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