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By *onny big OP   Man
over a year ago

london harrow

Im new to the scene and have only just put profile pics up and tried to make my profile show my personality

Im respectfull, polite and not pushy but dont seem to be getting any replys ive sent out loads of messages

where am i going wrong?

Any idea?

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By *rightonsteveMan
over a year ago

Brighton - even Hove!

So why isn't this phrase working for you?....."Ok here goes... before i charm the clitring off you let me tell you abit about myself!"

Also, you state that you're 'educated' but have spelling mistakes, grammatical errors and punctuation gaffs in your profile.

Want me to go on?

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By *ordonBennettMan
over a year ago

dover


"So why isn't this phrase working for you?....."Ok here goes... before i charm the clitring off you let me tell you abit about myself!"

Also, you state that you're 'educated' but have spelling mistakes, grammatical errors and punctuation gaffs in your profile.

Want me to go on?"

I quite agree. The profile needs a lot of work, is uninformative, disjointed, unclear and there are "ha has" after statements which are not in the least bit funny or ironic..frankly it's hard work.

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over a year ago

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By *icecouple561Couple
Forum Mod
over a year ago

East Sussex

No bearback?

You have stated all your requirements and used the phrase "you should be" while not really saying a huge amount about what you will be offering.

Have a read through your profile, imagine you're a woman and ask yourself if you'd respond.

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By *rightonsteveMan
over a year ago

Brighton - even Hove!


"No bearback?

You have stated all your requirements and used the phrase "you should be" while not really saying a huge amount about what you will be offering.

Have a read through your profile, imagine you're a woman and ask yourself if you'd respond."

Depends if they have a clit-ring

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By *icecouple561Couple
Forum Mod
over a year ago

East Sussex


"No bearback?

You have stated all your requirements and used the phrase "you should be" while not really saying a huge amount about what you will be offering.

Have a read through your profile, imagine you're a woman and ask yourself if you'd respond.

Depends if they have a clit-ring "

Wassup Steve!

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By *onny big OP   Man
over a year ago

london harrow

Ok i get it thanks i was just trying to be funny i soppose, you gotta laugh tho!

I am changing as soon as i post this

As for grammer, im on a smart phone from hell and my broadband is down! So it aint easy. I type as i think maby i should slow down abit!

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By *qua vitaeWoman
over a year ago

Shropshire/Midlands

I can understand you're trying to be funny, but it's not coming over as such. It does need a bit of a rewrite and take on board what others have suggested.

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By *othingButCocoChanelWoman
over a year ago

Glasgow

Not to be rude but your onto plums

"You must"

Hahahaha

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By *ordonBennettMan
over a year ago

dover


"As for grammer, im on a smart phone from hell and my broadband is down! So it aint easy. I type as i think maby i should slow down abit!"

I can't quite see how your broadband being down has an effect on your grammar, ..but you're dead right about the need to slow down and take time over the phrasing, spelling, sentiments, content, "humour" and word choice on your profile..

After all, you're setting out your stall so it needs careful attention and needs to be done slowly using plenty of thought..

Would you contact you?

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By *icecouple561Couple
Forum Mod
over a year ago

East Sussex

can I just say it's "bareback"

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By *rightonsteveMan
over a year ago

Brighton - even Hove!


"can I just say it's "bareback"

"

You sure? Grrrrr.....

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By *icecouple561Couple
Forum Mod
over a year ago

East Sussex


"can I just say it's "bareback"

You sure? Grrrrr..... "

I tried bear back once and his breath was that bad and the scratch marks

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By *onny big OP   Man
over a year ago

london harrow

Ok ive had a re- write is that any better? And thanks everyone your advice is very welcome!

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By *icecouple561Couple
Forum Mod
over a year ago

East Sussex


"Ok ive had a re- write is that any better? And thanks everyone your advice is very welcome!"

It still says bearback but otherwise it isn't too bad.

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By *onny big OP   Man
over a year ago

london harrow

And what do you mean im onto plums? Call me stupid but ive never heard that saying anywere

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By *rightonsteveMan
over a year ago

Brighton - even Hove!


"Ok ive had a re- write is that any better? And thanks everyone your advice is very welcome!"

Why not look at the grammar, capitals and general written communication? It like as though you simply can't be bothered to make the corrections (apart from spelling 'bareback' correctly) and really, if you can't be bothered with your own profile.....

Ask yourself: is this my absolute best effort I can do?

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By *othingButCocoChanelWoman
over a year ago

Glasgow


"And what do you mean im onto plums? Call me stupid but ive never heard that saying anywere"

Stooooopid lol

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

accommodate ffs! It us corrected by spell checkers and is hardly FLOCCI­NAUCINI­HILIPIL­IFICATION

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By *rightonsteveMan
over a year ago

Brighton - even Hove!

Look at this from your profile...."You must be witty and able to communicate properly!...."

Potential meets might think the same as you. It's 'interested' not 'intrested'. If you can't be bothered with your own profile some people might think you ant be bothered sexually. Why put barriers up? Make it all as easy for yourself as you can.

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By *ordonBennettMan
over a year ago

dover

Also you could delete most, if not all of the exclamation marks..as they come at the end of some pretty banal statements and don't belong there.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

If you have reviewed this then you need to do it again. Poor spelling, grammatical errors and dare I say it very dull. I'm sure you are kind, honest and witty, try and show this. For me Fi, I would never contact you purely because you state NSA twice. Us ladies are not stupid, we don't need this reinforced and we are in here for our pleasure as much as yours. We have a choice of hundreds (literally) single guys so you have to stand out from the crowd. And telling me your trustworthy and it's ok if I need to be discrete just send you a face pic anyway? Really? Why would anyone trust you? Trust is earnt! If I sound rude that is not my intention. Just being honest!

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By *rightonsteveMan
over a year ago

Brighton - even Hove!

Your profile is starting to improve although in the Great British Bake Off's of profiles, at the moment it's a very small, bland biscuit where the dough hasn't risen properly. For example, the couple above me here mentioned that trust is earned and, yup, that's gone straight in your profile.

What about this? ...."Its a big plus if your witty, honest and able to communicate properly...."

A little proof reading will come up with...."it's a big plus if you're witty, honest and able to communicate properly"....you've used the wrong 'your' so it makes your sentence about being able to communicate properly somewhat nonsensical. I'd also use the word "effectively" instead of "properly".

Hope this helps. Also, after 22 hours of posting, try and make time to get those capitals sorted out.

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