FabSwingers.com forum: Constructive criticism

By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

I was wondering if you lovely people would mind passing some on how my profile is viewed from outside eyes.

Thanks

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By *ranny-CrumpetWoman
over a year ago

King's Crustacean

Lose the first two paragraphs or replace them with something appealing.

The rest is fine.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Photos from 2009

Have you any older ones? Perhaps university photos?

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy. "

And erm old-y?

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Trust your instincts fella and stick with what reflects you. You don't want something too generic.

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Photos from 2009

Have you any older ones? Perhaps university photos?

I suppose they are quite dated although...tbh I haven't really changed and I haven't taken time to pose for pictures lately

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Photos from 2009

Have you any older ones? Perhaps university photos?

It's a fair point but what bit about constructive didn't you understand ?

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By *rightonsteveMan
over a year ago

Brighton - even Hove!

I'd put in about what I could offer, like what's your usp? Personally, I don't find the term 'scrum' very appealing.

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy. "

Ok I was going out that evening and that was the car I had at the time it was just a nice picture caught at the time.

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy.

And erm old-y?"

What the pictures are old or I look older than stated?

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Trust your instincts fella and stick with what reflects you. You don't want something too generic. "

That's the thing, I'm not a "I'm in your area" kind of guy and I try to be as polite as possible in messages

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Photos from 2009

Have you any older ones? Perhaps university photos?

It's a fair point but what bit about constructive didn't you understand ?"

No that's fine how it was worded it raised a smile tbh but thanks

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy.

And erm old-y?

What the pictures are old or I look older than stated?"

Not at all!

Sorry

I read a little bluntly

I just meant 5 years is a long time ago for a photo - you could look totally different that's all

It looks like your profile is getting neglected if it doesn't keep up with real time

That's my opinion

Cars can look a little tacky too x

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By *stwoCouple
over a year ago

anywhere

Why don't you accommodate?

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy.

Ok I was going out that evening and that was the car I had at the time it was just a nice picture caught at the time."

There's nothing wrong with it, and it is a nice pic , but some might think you were saying look at my lovely car.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Why don't you accommodate?"

Because I'm a single dad and it's my safe place for my children

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Why don't you accommodate?

Because I'm a single dad and it's my safe place for my children"

I'm a single dad - but I still can meet when my son isn't there. There are nice people out there you know

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy.

Ok I was going out that evening and that was the car I had at the time it was just a nice picture caught at the time.

There's nothing wrong with it, and it is a nice pic , but some might think you were saying look at my lovely car. "

Ok didn't think of that I was more impressed with the 1969 James Bond suit

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy.

And erm old-y?

What the pictures are old or I look older than stated?

Not at all!

Sorry

I read a little bluntly

I just meant 5 years is a long time ago for a photo - you could look totally different that's all

It looks like your profile is getting neglected if it doesn't keep up with real time

That's my opinion

Cars can look a little tacky too x"

unlike your pics which are all knda t he same shot showing a mobile phone and your nice bathroom tiles

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy.

And erm old-y?

What the pictures are old or I look older than stated?

Exactly

Not at all!

Sorry

I read a little bluntly

I just meant 5 years is a long time ago for a photo - you could look totally different that's all

It looks like your profile is getting neglected if it doesn't keep up with real time

That's my opinion

Cars can look a little tacky too x

unlike your pics which are all knda t he same shot showing a mobile phone and your nice bathroom tiles

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Why don't you accommodate?

Because I'm a single dad and it's my safe place for my children

I'm a single dad - but I still can meet when my son isn't there. There are nice people out there you know

I know

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy.

And erm old-y?

What the pictures are old or I look older than

Not at all!

Sorry

I read a little bluntly

I just meant 5 years is a long time ago for a photo - you could look totally different that's all

It looks like your profile is getting neglected if it doesn't keep up with real time

That's my opinion

Cars can look a little tacky too x

unlike your pics which are all knda t he same shot showing a mobile phone and your nice bathroom tiles

Hang on.......how do you know that? Lol

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Why don't you accommodate?

Because I'm a single dad and it's my safe place for my children

I'm a single dad - but I still can meet when my son isn't there. There are nice people out there you know

single parent also.. its just my preference not to allow people to my home where i display all my family pictures and things,, plus no one knows my address so cant go all weird n stalker like

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

It is a good profile. Profiles are always difficult to get right. Ours is not superb. If you are looking for advice, I would agree that the car picture is a bit, "Oh, look at my car," but that is a minor point.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy.

And erm old-y?

What the pictures are old or I look older than stated?

Not at all!

Sorry

I read a little bluntly

I just meant 5 years is a long time ago for a photo - you could look totally different that's all

It looks like your profile is getting neglected if it doesn't keep up with real time

That's my opinion

Cars can look a little tacky too x

unlike your pics which are all knda t he same shot showing a mobile phone and your nice bathroom tiles

Touché

But all the last month or so x

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By *abioMan
over a year ago

Newcastle and Gateshead

okay...mr blunt in the house!!!

your profile is generic... sorry.. its bland, its doesn't say anything about you, it doesn't say anything about the people you want to meet....

it just doesn't say anything... it just feels like an afterthought... like "well this sounds good" but in effect it says nothing....

two different ways to approach this...

1) if you think you have done your best to make yourself stand out, in the best way you can.... don't change a single thing!!!!!

2) if not... sit down and have a think, and change it!!!

okay.... look at your profile.... then have a look at a lot of the guys who have taken their time to reply in this thread....

then ask yourself one question... "hand on heart would you reply to your own profile?"

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By *risky_MareWoman
over a year ago

...Up on the Downs

"Second pic is good , some people may think the first one is a bit show offy.

Ok I was going out that evening and that was the car I had at the time it was just a nice picture caught at the time.

There's nothing wrong with it, and it is a nice pic , but some might think you were saying look at my lovely car.

Ok didn't think of that I was more impressed with the 1969 James Bond suit

It's fine, it's the kind of pic men take haha. If they're a bit old add a couple of up to date selfies showing a nice torso, and a more recent veri, and you're away. I would leave any idiosyncrasies in the text too - they show who someone is, their sense of humour etc IMO.

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By *ustcutieWoman
over a year ago

edinburgh

Well..... I would

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By *Ryan-Man
over a year ago

In Your Bush

Can't believe you're wearing a single button tux with nothing covering the bottom of your shirt

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By *Ryan-Man
over a year ago

In Your Bush

"Can't believe you're wearing a single button tux with nothing covering the bottom of your shirt

Ah bollox, just realised I didn't either

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"okay...mr blunt in the house!!!

your profile is generic... sorry.. its bland, its doesn't say anything about you, it doesn't say anything about the people you want to meet....

it just doesn't say anything... it just feels like an afterthought... like "well this sounds good" but in effect it says nothing....

two different ways to approach this...

1) if you think you have done your best to make yourself stand out, in the best way you can.... don't change a single thing!!!!!

2) if not... sit down and have a think, and change it!!!

okay.... look at your profile.... then have a look at a lot of the guys who have taken their time to reply in this thread....

then ask yourself one question... "hand on heart would you reply to your own profile?""

Ok now see that's a good point I'm trying to fly below the radar, not promise the earth maybe I'm a little to low and about to crash

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Well..... I would

Lol thanks x

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Can't believe you're wearing a single button tux with nothing covering the bottom of your shirt

Ah bollox, just realised I didn't either

Hahaha

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

How about something like this to replace the first 2 paragraphs ?

I'm Max,I'm 39 years and keep myself in shape. However I was made in 1974 when real manly men were built not the later version were a lot of corners and 90% angles were taken out and redefined to give a sleaker look....omg this is starting to sound like a car advert

but as we're on the subject of cars I'm more of a mustang than a Ferrari.

I look more like Bruce Willis than Bruce Almighty so that might give you an idea of my build.

I'm looking for relaxed unjudged fun for all envolved and hope you might like what you see and read.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"How about something like this to replace the first 2 paragraphs ?

but as we're on the subject of cars I'm more of a mustang than a Ferrari.

I look more like Bruce Willis than Bruce Almighty so that might give you an idea of my build.

I'm looking for relaxed unjudged fun for all envolved and hope you might like what you see and read.

for my tastes thats even worse than your current profile

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By *ranny-CrumpetWoman
over a year ago

King's Crustacean

Superb Max....

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Oh I'm sure it could be improved on

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"How about something like this to replace the first 2 paragraphs ?

but as we're on the subject of cars I'm more of a mustang than a Ferrari.

I look more like Bruce Willis than Bruce Almighty so that might give you an idea of my build.

I'm looking for relaxed unjudged fun for all envolved and hope you might like what you see and read.

No don't do it!!

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"How about something like this to replace the first 2 paragraphs ?

but as we're on the subject of cars I'm more of a mustang than a Ferrari.

I look more like Bruce Willis than Bruce Almighty so that might give you an idea of my build.

I'm looking for relaxed unjudged fun for all envolved and hope you might like what you see and read.

for my tastes thats even worse than your current profile "

Lol I was trying to inject some humour

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"How about something like this to replace the first 2 paragraphs ?

but as we're on the subject of cars I'm more of a mustang than a Ferrari.

I look more like Bruce Willis than Bruce Almighty so that might give you an idea of my build.

I'm looking for relaxed unjudged fun for all envolved and hope you might like what you see and read.

No don't do it!!"

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"Superb Max.... "

Is that a sarcastic superb?

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By *abioMan
over a year ago

Newcastle and Gateshead

dont run it past everyone!!!

this is not suppose to be "profile by committee" it is suppose to be "profile by you!"... and if you cant sell yourself to your own ability... no one else will

YOU!!!

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"dont run it past everyone!!!

this is not suppose to be "profile by committee" it is suppose to be "profile by you!"... and if you cant sell yourself to your own ability... no one else will

YOU!!!

True, I was seeing if it needed a little humour

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