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"That was a bit difficult to read," . I'm very sorry that it was hard to read but I'm not very good with punctuation but I will try my best with the next chapter for you | |||
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"That was a bit difficult to read,. I'm very sorry that it was hard to read but I'm not very good with punctuation but I will try my best with the next chapter for you " Thanks, Dave. Interesting start. Just stick a full stop where you naturally draw breath. | |||
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"That was a bit difficult to read,. I'm very sorry that it was hard to read but I'm not very good with punctuation but I will try my best with the next chapter for you " Thanks for the story so far. I hope you take it constructively, but breaking it down into paragraphs would make it easier to read. Punctuation in general seemed fine to me. | |||
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"Lack of punctuation doesn't detract. And actually, a decent level of reading comprehension enables you to know where punctuation should be placed, making reading it as easy as if it was fully punctuated. Keep it up OP, it's a good intro to the story." ![]() ![]() ![]() | |||
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