FabSwingers.com forum: That Moment......

By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

It's a quiet Sunday afternoon and I thought I would put something different on the forum for a change.

This is a piece I wrote in response to a creative writing challenge on another site, it is about THAT Moment, that moment when he or she or you cum

please post your contribution in the reply spaces below i'm sure we will have some very talented writers of short pieces out there

This is mine

Shaking and heaving our bodies slick with exertion

breathing shallow'd and rapid,

I claw at his flesh trying not to drown in the sensations he is driving from me,

I'm unable to focus my eyes, I can feel the blood vessels pop from the pressure of his hand on my throat, cutting off my air and making me light headed

I can hear only the guttural grunting of his involuntary song as he pushes us towards the edge

Hard flesh engulfs me and fills me till I scream, silently, the non sound swallowed by the rasp of his breath

and then I feel it, time stands still, the swelling that tells my body 'THAT moment' is here, a calling, a joining, my body dragging his release from his very core

His head goes back as the first wave of that moment hits him and his howl rents the air asunder

white heat explodes inside me, burning into my body like molten lava forcing me to join his dance of ecstasy, squeezing, pulsing, driving into me till there is nothing left but tremors

We lay peaceful

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By *isscheekychopsWoman
over a year ago

The land of grey peas and bacon

As he came I rolled over and went to sleep

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

and the first time she touched my cock, I came and started farting

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By *ranny-CrumpetWoman
over a year ago

The Town by The Cross

Lick, Shudder, Spurt, Gasp.

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By *andybeachWoman
over a year ago

In the middle

"Lick, Shudder, Spurt, Gasp."

Is that the workings of a combustion engine

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By *ranny-CrumpetWoman
over a year ago

The Town by The Cross

"Lick, Shudder, Spurt, Gasp.

Is that the workings of a combustion engine

Cum bustion you mean

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"As he came I rolled over and went to sleep

Thank god....thought i'd have to stay up and make pillow talk for a bit then...

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By *ranny-CrumpetWoman
over a year ago

The Town by The Cross

Are you despairing Missmo ?

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

Are you despairing Missmo ?"

YES

Come on children put the crayons down (yes including you gimp) and let the creative side out, don't be shy lol

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

I mean lets face it this has to be better than, makeup tips, what are you having for lunch, Sunday roast, shark films yada yada yada

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"I mean lets face it this has to be better than, makeup tips, what are you having for lunch, Sunday roast, shark films yada yada yada

Sorry, I'd much rather the makeup tips. Most writing makes me cringe.

I don't think the English language lends itself well to erotic writing. (And I don't know if any others do either.) The real power for me is in imagination, rather than someone else's words. And I realise this is a bit hypocritical from someone with a poem on their profile.

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By *ranny-CrumpetWoman
over a year ago

The Town by The Cross

"I mean lets face it this has to be better than, makeup tips, what are you having for lunch, Sunday roast, shark films yada yada yada

Sorry Miss.

I'm off out but I might have a go later.

Everyone do as she says.

Write Write Write!!

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

then tosh runs out to the balcony thinking hes back on a cruise ship.. throws his arms out wide and bursts out in song, singing 'my heart will go on'

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By *igeiaWoman
over a year ago

Bristol

I occasionally write my experiences down but they are too personal to want to share on here. I appreciate those that do but I also know enough good writers to know I am not one of them.

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By *andybeachWoman
over a year ago

In the middle

I'm off to put me make up on while eating my dinner watching a terrible shark film

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By *andybeachWoman
over a year ago

In the middle

"then tosh runs out to the balcony thinking hes back on a cruise ship.. throws his arms out wide and bursts out in song, singing 'my heart will go on'

He looked beautiful in that evening gown as well

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"I mean lets face it this has to be better than, makeup tips, what are you having for lunch, Sunday roast, shark films yada yada yada

Sorry, I'd much rather the makeup tips. Most writing makes me cringe.

Have to agree that most writing, which is meant to be erotic, just ends up cringe worthy and full of cliches. Poems can work better as they're more open to interruption by the reader.

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By *rcticFoxxxWoman
over a year ago

Hereabouts

I don't need to write it.. The whole bloody block of flats can hear that moment!

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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago

"I don't need to write it.. The whole bloody block of flats can hear that moment! "

none of us need to write it, I just thought it would be something a little different from the norm to amuse us a little on a rainy Sunday

not to worry eh

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"I don't need to write it.. The whole bloody block of flats can hear that moment! "

And the block opposite....

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"I don't need to write it.. The whole bloody block of flats can hear that moment! "

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"I don't need to write it.. The whole bloody block of flats can hear that moment!

none of us need to write it, I just thought it would be something a little different from the norm to amuse us a little on a rainy Sunday

not to worry eh

Keep it up...plenty folk will like it....

Stick some stuff in the stories/fanasies section maybe

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By *rcticFoxxxWoman
over a year ago

Hereabouts

"I don't need to write it.. The whole bloody block of flats can hear that moment!

And the block opposite...."

Lol fuck off

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By *rcticFoxxxWoman
over a year ago

Hereabouts

"I don't need to write it.. The whole bloody block of flats can hear that moment!

none of us need to write it, I just thought it would be something a little different from the norm to amuse us a little on a rainy Sunday

not to worry eh

It's not raining here but I'll put my writing cap on

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By *iamondjoeMan
over a year ago

Glastonbury

If yr gonna do something, do it well...

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By *iamondjoeMan
over a year ago

Glastonbury

e.e.cummings - she being Brand

she being Brand

-new;and you

know consequently a

little stiff I was

careful of her and (having

thoroughly oiled the universal

joint tested my gas felt of

her radiator made sure her springs were O.

K.)i went right to it flooded-the-carburetor cranked her

up,slipped the

clutch (and then somehow got into reverse she

kicked what

the hell) next

minute i was back in neutral tried and

again slo-wly;bare,ly nudg. ing(my

lev-er Right-

oh and her gears being in

A 1 shape passed

from low through

second-in-to-high like

greasedlightning) just as we turned the corner of Divinity

avenue i touched the accelerator and give

her the juice,good

(it

was the first ride and believe I we was

happy to see how nice and acted right up to

the last minute coming back down by the Public

Gardens I slammed on

the

internalexpanding

externalcontracting

breaks Bothatonce and

brought allofher tremB

-ling

to a:dead.

stand-

;Still)

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By *ranny-CrumpetWoman
over a year ago

The Town by The Cross

"e.e.cummings - she being Brand

she being Brand

-new;and you

know consequently a

little stiff I was

careful of her and (having

thoroughly oiled the universal

joint tested my gas felt of

her radiator made sure her springs were O.

K.)i went right to it flooded-the-carburetor cranked her

up,slipped the

clutch (and then somehow got into reverse she

kicked what

the hell) next

minute i was back in neutral tried and

again slo-wly;bare,ly nudg. ing(my

lev-er Right-

oh and her gears being in

A 1 shape passed

from low through

second-in-to-high like

greasedlightning) just as we turned the corner of Divinity

avenue i touched the accelerator and give

her the juice,good

(it

was the first ride and believe I we was

happy to see how nice and acted right up to

the last minute coming back down by the Public

Gardens I slammed on

the

internalexpanding

externalcontracting

breaks Bothatonce and

brought allofher tremB

-ling

to a:dead.

stand-

;Still)

Class.

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