FabSwingers.com forum: How long is too long?

By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

We are talking about profile text... get your minds out of the gutter

we already know our answer to the latter entendres of the double entendre.

We have put effort into making our profile text stand out and have recently been told to trim it back a bit... we aren’t so sure as we feel most of the information we are putting out is important.

Thoughts?

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Personally speaking far to long . Boring even to a reader ....I'd trim each paragraph down to a minimum and even join some together .

Half the info is of no interest really.

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By *e52Man
over a year ago

St Saviours

Hello to you all, a long shot I know but tomorrow (wed 20) I will be in Southampton at 08.00 and with an appointment at 15 30 I will have lots of time to spare I am 65 and would like to find a female who can accommodate and willing for adult fun

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Bob

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"We are talking about profile text... get your minds out of the gutter

we already know our answer to the latter entendres of the double entendre.

We have put effort into making our profile text stand out and have recently been told to trim it back a bit... we aren’t so sure as we feel most of the information we are putting out is important.

Thoughts?"
something this size of info above and thing longer people do not read but most of here are only here to look at photo which make them talk to others sorry but i am honest

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

I’d read it

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"Personally speaking far to long . Boring even to a reader ....I'd trim each paragraph down to a minimum and even join some together .

Half the info is of no interest really."

Will take that under advisement.

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"I’d read it

Why thank you good lady!

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By *aiseaneyebrowMan
over a year ago

Fylde

"We are talking about profile text... get your minds out of the gutter

we already know our answer to the latter entendres of the double entendre.

We have put effort into making our profile text stand out and have recently been told to trim it back a bit... we aren’t so sure as we feel most of the information we are putting out is important.

Thoughts?"

It’s a sizeable tome I’ll give you that. Content strikes me at pertinent and valid. I struggle with the 3rd person style. But if it reflects you and your desires accurately then all is good.

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"Hello to you all, a long shot I know but tomorrow (wed 20) I will be in Southampton at 08.00 and with an appointment at 15 30 I will have lots of time to spare I am 65 and would like to find a female who can accommodate and willing for adult fun

Regards

Bob

Thanks Bob! Very flattering. However, unable to make that happen. Happy hunting!

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

It is just my personal opinion, referring to yourself as "they" is a little offputting.

Otherwise you sell yourself well.

No hats being thrown in from me though.

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

[Removed by poster at 19/02/19 10:49:20]

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"We are talking about profile text... get your minds out of the gutter

we already know our answer to the latter entendres of the double entendre.

We have put effort into making our profile text stand out and have recently been told to trim it back a bit... we aren’t so sure as we feel most of the information we are putting out is important.

Thoughts? something this size of info above and thing longer people do not read but most of here are only here to look at photo which make them talk to others sorry but i am honest"

Thanks for the honesty

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"Personally speaking far to long . Boring even to a reader ....I'd trim each paragraph down to a minimum and even join some together .

Half the info is of no interest really."

“Too” long

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By *aiseaneyebrowMan
over a year ago

Fylde

"[Removed by poster at 19/02/19 10:49:20]"

Filtration by literary stamina? Quirky approach.

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"It is just my personal opinion, referring to yourself as "they" is a little offputting.

Otherwise you sell yourself well.

No hats being thrown in from me though."

All good!

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By *allySlinkyWoman
over a year ago

Leeds

Do you really need to say "act now they are getting more picky by the minute" three times ?

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"[Removed by poster at 19/02/19 10:49:20]

Filtration by literary stamina? Quirky approach. "

Quirky we are!

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"Do you really need to say "act now they are getting more picky by the minute" three times ? "

Third time’s the charm

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By *aiseaneyebrowMan
over a year ago

Fylde

"[Removed by poster at 19/02/19 10:49:20]

Filtration by literary stamina? Quirky approach.

Quirky we are!"

The best ones all are.

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"We are talking about profile text... get your minds out of the gutter

we already know our answer to the latter entendres of the double entendre.

We have put effort into making our profile text stand out and have recently been told to trim it back a bit... we aren’t so sure as we feel most of the information we are putting out is important.

Thoughts?

It’s a sizeable tome I’ll give you that. Content strikes me at pertinent and valid. I struggle with the 3rd person style. But if it reflects you and your desires accurately then all is good. "

The, unintended, second order effect of the long profile seems to be that it s out a decent portion of folks for whom we aren’t really looking. We thrive on the social side of the lifestyle and a well thought out message indicates to us a like mind able to converse and hold their own in our company.

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By *aiseaneyebrowMan
over a year ago

Fylde

I can entirely empathise. The mutual intellectual challenge and stimulation is as important as the physical.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

I read it. Length ok if all the content was unique and not repeated. Main issue is the switching between 1st and 3rd person. Sorry but it reads like a bad cut and past in places with only your names added. Read it out aloud and I am sure you will fix it so it flows.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

*paste

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"*paste"

Will do!

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

Profile text streamlined a bit. Double checked all is in the intended third person (bet it sticks in your memory for good or ill). Found a few glaring errors and polished them off.

Have posted questions on our profile text on this forum several times now and always learn something

. Thanks all.

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

Bump

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Do you mean a 'few neat experiences' or new experiences.

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By *allySlinkyWoman
over a year ago

Leeds

Neat experiences.

When they take their clothes off on a meet they fold them up.

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By *eal_curves_is_backWoman
over a year ago

London

Regards

Bob

They do not just not read the profiles. They cannot even see what the thread is about before posting on it.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

"We are talking about profile text... get your minds out of the gutter

we already know our answer to the latter entendres of the double entendre.

We have put effort into making our profile text stand out and have recently been told to trim it back a bit... we aren’t so sure as we feel most of the information we are putting out is important.

Thoughts?"

I read yours before, I like it, it's a bit long though, not too long for me. It's more the 3rd person that makes it harder to read for me.

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"Neat experiences.

When they take their clothes off on a meet they fold them up. "

Ha! Nice catch

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By *winkleFairyCouple
over a year ago

It is long. No getting away from that. Is that necessarily a bad thing? In my experience, no!

If you find you aren’t attracting the right sort of people then maybe consider changing it... if it’s working for you then go with it!

Personally, I read it and I think it sounds great! Perhaps not the couple for me, but I hope you find what you are looking for!

Mrs Twinkle Xx

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By *lceeWoman
over a year ago

Leeds

I LOVED it! Oh my, you two are quite the awesome pair, aren’t you? I absolutely fell in love with you both by the time I reached oxford commas and double spacing. Double spacing. Perfection.

Potentially, to break it down a bit, you could split out the paragraphs so you have many smaller paragraphs rather than a few long ones. Other than that, you push your core messaging out with a liberal sprinkling of humour. I would absolutely not cut it down.

However, as you can see, I’m a sucker for a long message

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"It is long. No getting away from that. Is that necessarily a bad thing? In my experience, no!

If you find you aren’t attracting the right sort of people then maybe consider changing it... if it’s working for you then go with it!

Personally, I read it and I think it sounds great! Perhaps not the couple for me, but I hope you find what you are looking for!

Mrs Twinkle Xx"

Thanks! It does seem to be attracting the right folks. I’ll try and tighten it up a tad more at some point but am feeling ok with it now. Happy hunting!

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"I LOVED it! Oh my, you two are quite the awesome pair, aren’t you? I absolutely fell in love with you both by the time I reached oxford commas and double spacing. Double spacing. Perfection.

However, as you can see, I’m a sucker for a long message

Thanks! What an awesome vote of confidence! You know of course that we now have to go perv your profile

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By *lorious hole bs16Man
over a year ago

Bristol

It is YOUR profile, if people find it too long and boring,they are probably not the type you would be interested in.

People tend to scan through long profiles and take info they need..

Adjust for yourself and not others...

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By *ou only live onceMan
over a year ago

London

I personally don't think it's too long - always good to see some detail, though as others have said breaking the paragraphs down a little might make it slightly less dense.

If I'm being honest, I do find the speaking about yourselves in the third person a bit weird though! (And yes I get you might be speaking as your alter-egos, but still a bit odd, imho!)

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"It is YOUR profile, if people find it too long and boring,they are probably not the type you would be interested in.

People tend to scan through long profiles and take info they need..

Adjust for yourself and not others..."

Thanks! The profile is keeping our dance card quite full

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By *dquest OP Couple
over a year ago

Peterborough

"I personally don't think it's too long - always good to see some detail, though as others have said breaking the paragraphs down a little might make it slightly less dense.

If I'm being honest, I do find the speaking about yourselves in the third person a bit weird though! (And yes I get you might be speaking as your alter-egos, but still a bit odd, imho!)"

I just condensed it as others have said there were too many paragraphs! Ha! All good!

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