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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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"If you think that your picture might be off putting, change it for one that isn't.
And maybe add a few more while you're at it.
Nothing overly wrong with your profile in as much as it's contents - but don't let an English teacher see it, you'll give them a heart attack.
Don't want to be too hard on you, (and I can already hear the cries of 'why should grammar and punctuation matter, this is a sex site ffs'), but it's worth considering that it actually DOES make a difference.
Your profile is your advert. Your chance to sell yourself. The words you write and how you phrase things are all that a reader has to go on with regard to learning about you as a person.
Try reading it through again.
Think about your use of comma's etc.
For example, let's take your second paragraph.
'Laid back, easy going looking for friends and nsa fun, into most things. Due to shifts I do have limited times sometime, I can travel but can't or very rarely accomdate.'
The first sentence stops suddenly after 'into most things' whereas, because of how it's punctuated, one would expect the sentence to carry on.
You mention that you can't (or can rarely) accommodate (by the way, check your spelling), but you don't explain why. From what I've read on these forums, a lot of people get very suspicious of men who can't accommodate (they think that they're married and cheating on wifey)
Like I said though, your profile's not bad - just needs a final polish."
If we are going to pick up on grammar etc. (which some people do) then it should be commas and not comma's as a comma cannot be possessive. If you wish to correct someone's use of English then please be correct in your own usage.
To the OP.... Yes, there is a valid point on spelling and grammar. You have, however, identified the main problem yourself....your picture!
While I don't wish to be rude it makes you look like a thug/hooligan. Take or use some more relaxed, natural pics....smile.
Other than that your profile seems decent enough...good luck! |
