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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no

Okay so my profile is going to be a little bit different than your normal profile, I’m going to write how I would talk to you ( couples&women) in real life. (Because I know some people don’t read my profile)

Hello my name is roxy (not real name obviously) (but I’m only using this name for protection because of my job and everything) so where was I right my name is roxy,

I live in a little country called Taunton, I have lived there most of my life, (it’s honestly kinda shit) i don’t really travel to places I don’t know very well so let’s say for example you (couples&women) live in Plymouth I wouldn’t feel that confident on going to meet you (couples&women). I don’t drive a car, I haven’t got a license to drive a car, so if you (couples&women) live far like all the way in a place I don’t know you (couples&women) will have to be the one making your (couples&women) way over to Taunton or meet halfway.

Now on to why I’m on a swingers site basically I’m just wanting to experience my first threesome (FFM) and possibly make some friends along the way

I have an amazing toy collection (and no I don’t mean action figures) I mean I’ve got a strap-on I’ve got didlos, I’ve got vibrationing didlos I’ve got two wands I’ve even got a fucking machine (I love using my toys on women especially love hearing their moans)

Now on to the bit some of you (couples&women) ignore. ( I should really write it at the top so all of you (couples&women) can see)

Now I work as a carer in a supported living and my job is quite strict about certain stuff and just as a double caution I would rather my personal pictures for example pictures of me naked with my face in, pictures of my face, pictures of my boobs, be on my friends list only. And no I’m not trying to make an official club or that I think my pictures are something special. It’s because of my job and work place. I DON’T ACCEPT FRIENDS REQUESTS I REPEAT I DON’T ACCEPT FRIENDS REQUESTS TO THE PEOPLE (couples&women) WHO CAN’T READ I DON’T ACCEPT FRIENDS REQUESTS. Till we have met for a social that could be anything like going out to a bar or going to a cafe I don’t know that’s up to you (women&couples).

Okay now on to what I look like because some people don’t like certain things or are shocked by certain parts of my body, so my pussy is not shaved (because I don’t like using a razor i prefer to wax my pussy) but I do try and trim it down so their is no hair, if you (women&couples) don’t like hair or you (women&couples) prefer a hairless pussy then please please just block my account because their is no point wasting both of our time and energy. I wouldn’t say I’m attractive but I would say I’m decent looking, if you (women&couples) don’t like what you (women&couples) see or you don’t see me as “attractive” please block me because I don’t want my time wasted or your (women&couples) time wasted.

So just to make things clearer for some people (women&couples) if I’m not your (women&couples) type or my profile isn’t for you (women& couples) please please block me

Now I’m happy to chat on here as I don’t have WhatsApp I don’t have Snapchat I do have Skype

All valid criticism is welcome, (I know my account is private but I just want thoughts on my new bio at the top)

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By *dwalu2Couple
over a year ago

Bristol

You need to change ‘didlos’ to ‘dildos’.

Why do you keep repeating ‘couples & women’ throughout? It’s pretty clear after the first five times!

We get it, men don’t always take the hint, but you could just block them. The profile would be more readable if you took the repeated mentions out.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Um am I missing the joke?

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By *sBlueWoman
over a year ago

Up North

Bit too long would cut it down a bit

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By *wist my nipplesCouple
over a year ago

North East Scotland, mostly

It’s about what works for you. If that bio is you and how you want to present yourself, then go for it. It is a bio that’s certainly going to divide opinion but that may well be what you’re going for. Is there anything specific you want advice on? Mr.

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"It’s about what works for you. If that bio is you and how you want to present yourself, then go for it. It is a bio that’s certainly going to divide opinion but that may well be what you’re going for. Is there anything specific you want advice on? Mr. "

Just what people thought, that’s all, as I said all valid criticism is great

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"You need to change ‘didlos’ to ‘dildos’.

Why do you keep repeating ‘couples & women’ throughout? It’s pretty clear after the first five times!

We get it, men don’t always take the hint, but you could just block them. The profile would be more readable if you took the repeated mentions out."

I keep repeating because some people can’t take a hint and because I feel like some people can’t read.... they still ask “what are you looking for” and I have read their whole ass profile

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"Um am I missing the joke? "

Yes

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By *ucka39Man
over a year ago

Newcastle


"You need to change ‘didlos’ to ‘dildos’.

Why do you keep repeating ‘couples & women’ throughout? It’s pretty clear after the first five times!

We get it, men don’t always take the hint, but you could just block them. The profile would be more readable if you took the repeated mentions out.

I keep repeating because some people can’t take a hint and because I feel like some people can’t read.... they still ask “what are you looking for” and I have read their whole ass profile "

I understand your point.but how many of those actually read the bio, and just message or read and ignore and still message. Only way around this, would be to use the block features and from this it creates a platform based around what your looking for.

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"You need to change ‘didlos’ to ‘dildos’.

Why do you keep repeating ‘couples & women’ throughout? It’s pretty clear after the first five times!

We get it, men don’t always take the hint, but you could just block them. The profile would be more readable if you took the repeated mentions out.

I keep repeating because some people can’t take a hint and because I feel like some people can’t read.... they still ask “what are you looking for” and I have read their whole ass profile

I understand your point.but how many of those actually read the bio, and just message or read and ignore and still message. Only way around this, would be to use the block features and from this it creates a platform based around what your looking for."

I understand, I will be doing that, BUT when I go on the cams that’s where most of my problems start. I’m trying to just make things clearer for those who just see woman and are like oh that means she likes men, you know what I mean

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By *harAndBryCouple
over a year ago

Peterborough / Stamford

It's awfully hard to read - maybe find someone who is play with you swinging and get then to proof read it. All the repeats of couples/women thing is weird, and the lack of punctuation makes it a bit of a trawl.

I'd not mention your toys with so much enthusiasm. Most women don't want toys inside them that have been inside other people.

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By *ucka39Man
over a year ago

Newcastle


"You need to change ‘didlos’ to ‘dildos’.

Why do you keep repeating ‘couples & women’ throughout? It’s pretty clear after the first five times!

We get it, men don’t always take the hint, but you could just block them. The profile would be more readable if you took the repeated mentions out.

I keep repeating because some people can’t take a hint and because I feel like some people can’t read.... they still ask “what are you looking for” and I have read their whole ass profile

I understand your point.but how many of those actually read the bio, and just message or read and ignore and still message. Only way around this, would be to use the block features and from this it creates a platform based around what your looking for.

I understand, I will be doing that, BUT when I go on the cams that’s where most of my problems start. I’m trying to just make things clearer for those who just see woman and are like oh that means she likes men, you know what I mean"

Then at the start of your bio small paragraph pointing out, should help to a degree, those who ignore straight block it's not harsh.x

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By *ucka39Man
over a year ago

Newcastle


"You need to change ‘didlos’ to ‘dildos’.

Why do you keep repeating ‘couples & women’ throughout? It’s pretty clear after the first five times!

We get it, men don’t always take the hint, but you could just block them. The profile would be more readable if you took the repeated mentions out.

I keep repeating because some people can’t take a hint and because I feel like some people can’t read.... they still ask “what are you looking for” and I have read their whole ass profile

I understand your point.but how many of those actually read the bio, and just message or read and ignore and still message. Only way around this, would be to use the block features and from this it creates a platform based around what your looking for.

I understand, I will be doing that, BUT when I go on the cams that’s where most of my problems start. I’m trying to just make things clearer for those who just see woman and are like oh that means she likes men, you know what I mean

Then at the start of your bio small paragraph pointing out, should help to a degree, those who ignore straight block it's not harsh.x"

And also are the options to use the filters for messages whilst using cam or use of the privacy feature. Some do

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"It's awfully hard to read - maybe find someone who is play with you swinging and get then to proof read it. All the repeats of couples/women thing is weird, and the lack of punctuation makes it a bit of a trawl.

I'd not mention your toys with so much enthusiasm. Most women don't want toys inside them that have been inside other people."

Totally understand what you mean about the couples part the only reason why I keep mentioning it is because when I approach a couple on here like I address both of them after a certain number of messages it’s clear that only one half is interested and that’s only the Male half. And it gets really off putting sometimes, and I have double read it and the only problem I see with my punctuation is that I’m using ( that too much, and if you are on about my spelling I can’t spell for shit

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago


"You need to change ‘didlos’ to ‘dildos’.

Why do you keep repeating ‘couples & women’ throughout? It’s pretty clear after the first five times!

We get it, men don’t always take the hint, but you could just block them. The profile would be more readable if you took the repeated mentions out.

I keep repeating because some people can’t take a hint and because I feel like some people can’t read.... they still ask “what are you looking for” and I have read their whole ass profile "

I was wondering how you get people interested in your profile, without pics or exchanging pics, before chatting?

Does that style work for you?

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"You need to change ‘didlos’ to ‘dildos’.

Why do you keep repeating ‘couples & women’ throughout? It’s pretty clear after the first five times!

We get it, men don’t always take the hint, but you could just block them. The profile would be more readable if you took the repeated mentions out.

I keep repeating because some people can’t take a hint and because I feel like some people can’t read.... they still ask “what are you looking for” and I have read their whole ass profile

I was wondering how you get people interested in your profile, without pics or exchanging pics, before chatting?

Does that style work for you?"

I’m happy to show my body to people but I find some people then ask to see more or to talk on kik or Snapchat. Or like in the past I had my face pictures on my profile and people still wanted more even after I told them of my situation and work. Like I’m happy to send face pictures but if after I send them that person then added me as a friend it kinda pisses me off I’m just saying

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago


"You need to change ‘didlos’ to ‘dildos’.

Why do you keep repeating ‘couples & women’ throughout? It’s pretty clear after the first five times!

We get it, men don’t always take the hint, but you could just block them. The profile would be more readable if you took the repeated mentions out.

I keep repeating because some people can’t take a hint and because I feel like some people can’t read.... they still ask “what are you looking for” and I have read their whole ass profile

I was wondering how you get people interested in your profile, without pics or exchanging pics, before chatting?

Does that style work for you?

I’m happy to show my body to people but I find some people then ask to see more or to talk on kik or Snapchat. Or like in the past I had my face pictures on my profile and people still wanted more even after I told them of my situation and work. Like I’m happy to send face pictures but if after I send them that person then added me as a friend it kinda pisses me off I’m just saying "

Just like to say,

It happens that way to a lot of females. You do what suits you - I believe a lot about this site is patience.

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By *oobyHotwifeWoman
over a year ago

Thurrock


"You need to change ‘didlos’ to ‘dildos’.

Why do you keep repeating ‘couples & women’ throughout? It’s pretty clear after the first five times!

We get it, men don’t always take the hint, but you could just block them. The profile would be more readable if you took the repeated mentions out.

I keep repeating because some people can’t take a hint and because I feel like some people can’t read.... they still ask “what are you looking for” and I have read their whole ass profile "

The people that can't take the hint are the same people that won't read the whole bio, if they even get as far as the bio at all

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

It’s a bit of a read….. personally I have minimised my

Profile as I prefer to chat and suss people / let them suss me before deciding on a meet

Good luck x

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

who is gonna read your profile if its only on the forums?

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By *egvisir71Man
over a year ago

Derbyshire

There is no such thing as ‘valid criticism’, just criticism.

Feedback is a positive thing, criticism isn’t.

My feedback is that it repeats things unnecessarily and goes on too long.

If you choose to take my feedback then that’s up to you but good luck and happy Fabbing

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Too long, didn't read. Soz.

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"It’s a bit of a read….. personally I have minimised my

Profile as I prefer to chat and suss people / let them suss me before deciding on a meet

Good luck x"

When you end up saying the same thing to people like I like this I like that then you find out 1 they are not interested or two they end up pushing their man on you (me). That’s when things become an issue if you understand what I mean, I am taking in people’s advice and I am learning but just sometimes I feel like im the cunt when messaging people. I have decided to start again but I’m keeping this account to the forums because I feel like I made shit worst for myself

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"Too long, didn't read. Soz."

Don’t need to apologise plus you are both too far from me anyway

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"who is gonna read your profile if its only on the forums?"

As I said I was asking for criticism so to be honest I don’t care who sees I’m not trying to sound like a dick

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Personally i think its too long. Short and sweet, leave something to imagine and chat about

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"Personally i think its too long. Short and sweet, leave something to imagine and chat about "

What bits do you think I should take out?? Like so people actually understand what my profile is on about?? Like what I mean is how do I cut it down so people still understand what I am on about and don’t ask endless or the same question that the last couples asked or the couples that can’t read don’t send friends requests

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"Personally i think its too long. Short and sweet, leave something to imagine and chat about "

Because basically that’s where all the problems start like I could have 1000s of pictures of me on my PUBLIC profile and still get a few couples asking to see more. I am understanding what some of yall are saying but some people end up taking the piss, like men I can kinda deal with but when it comes to couples on her they can be just as bad as the men, sorry if I’m rambling it’s just hard to explain everything on a public forum

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Maybe include all the same information you want on but in bullet point form? Do whatever works for you i was just trying to say me personally, i would stop reading and not message you but my boyfriend reads everything so it definitely wont push many away

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Hello, the male half of this couple replied earlier; now for the female perspective. I know we’re too far away and therefore this wouldn’t apply to us anyway but you’ve asked for help so that’s what I’m offering.

In all honesty, as a woman and part of a couple, I’d be very put off by what you’ve written. I appreciate what you’ve said about people ignoring your preference, but you’re also going to lose people like me who do read the bios in full. It reads in quite a passive aggressive or, to be blunt, totally strange way. I think you can say it once and then at the bottom, ask anyone who has read the profile in full to put “women and couples” as the subject in their message so you can just delete any messages that don’t have that.

I don’t think you need to explain that you’re using a false name or why. Maybe just say “you can call me Roxy”. It’s implied that way but phrased a bit more nicely.

I agree with others about the sex toys. When I read that, it makes me think you’re a man posing as a woman. I don’t like reading about what people are going to do to me (bar my boyfriend) or what they’re going to use.

Definitely include your preferences. If you don’t shave, no problem, great to be honest. And that’s all I can remember for now. Hope it helps

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"Hello, the male half of this couple replied earlier; now for the female perspective. I know we’re too far away and therefore this wouldn’t apply to us anyway but you’ve asked for help so that’s what I’m offering.

In all honesty, as a woman and part of a couple, I’d be very put off by what you’ve written. I appreciate what you’ve said about people ignoring your preference, but you’re also going to lose people like me who do read the bios in full. It reads in quite a passive aggressive or, to be blunt, totally strange way. I think you can say it once and then at the bottom, ask anyone who has read the profile in full to put “women and couples” as the subject in their message so you can just delete any messages that don’t have that.

I don’t think you need to explain that you’re using a false name or why. Maybe just say “you can call me Roxy”. It’s implied that way but phrased a bit more nicely.

I agree with others about the sex toys. When I read that, it makes me think you’re a man posing as a woman. I don’t like reading about what people are going to do to me (bar my boyfriend) or what they’re going to use.

Definitely include your preferences. If you don’t shave, no problem, great to be honest. And that’s all I can remember for now. Hope it helps "

Thank you, I am going to make some changes to the bio, the part where you say add the text at the bottom I have done that before and you can just tell that they haven’t read your (my) bio because they then ask what I’m interested in or what I’m looking for. Honestly I will be honest with everyone, when I had a short but sweet bio i felt like I was getting more mugged off by people like I will give an example I could start talking to a couples profile and then the woman in the relationship will then try and push her man to sleep with me and when I get uncomfortable or say I thought both of you meet up together that’s when I get told no he just wants to meet you. It’s kinda draining after a while, then you got the couples who are all talk no interest which I understand but when you have been messaging for ages that’s when I feel like it takes the piss. I’m going to write a fresh bio then see what yall think so far the only thing that seems to piss people off is the fact I add this () and keep saying women and couples

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no

Okay so my profile is going to be a little bit different than your normal profile, I’m going to write 1 to 4 because some of you can’t read (no offence)

1. Hello my name is roxy (not real name obviously) (but I’m only using this name for protection because of my job and everything),so where was I right my name is roxy,

I live in a little country called Taunton, I have lived there most of my life, (it’s honestly kinda shit) I don’t really travel to places I don’t know very well so let’s say for example you (couples&women) live in Plymouth I wouldn’t feel that confident on going to meet you (couples&women). I don’t drive a car, I haven’t got a license to drive a car, so if you (couples&women) live far like all the way in a place I don’t know you (couples&women) will have to be the one making your (couples&women) way over to Taunton or meet halfway.

2. Now on to why I’m on a swingers site basically I’m just wanting to experience my first threesome (FFM) and possibly make some friends along the way

3. Now on to the bit some of you (couples&women) ignore. ( I should really write it at the top so all of you (couples&women) can see)

Now I work as a carer in a supported living and my job is quite strict about certain stuff and just as a double caution I would rather my personal pictures for example pictures of me naked with my face in, pictures of my face, pictures of my boobs, be on my friends list only. And no I’m not trying to make an official club or that I think my pictures are something special. It’s because of my job and work place. I DON’T ACCEPT FRIENDS REQUESTS I REPEAT I DON’T ACCEPT FRIENDS REQUESTS TO THE PEOPLE (couples&women) WHO CAN’T READ I DON’T ACCEPT FRIENDS REQUESTS. Till we have met for a social that could be anything like going out to a bar or going to a cafe I don’t know that’s up to you (women&couples).

4. Okay now on to what I look like because some people don’t like certain things or are shocked by certain parts of my body, so my pussy is not shaved (because I don’t like using a razor i prefer to wax my pussy) but I do try and trim it down so their is no hair, if you (women&couples) don’t like hair or you (women&couples) prefer a hairless pussy then please please just block my account because their is no point wasting both of our time and energy. I wouldn’t say I’m attractive but I would say I’m decent looking, if you (women&couples) don’t like what you (women&couples) see or you don’t see me as “attractive” please block me because I don’t want my time wasted or your (women&couples) time wasted.

5. So just to make things clearer for some people (women&couples) if I’m not your (women&couples) type or my profile isn’t for you (women& couples) please please block me

6. I don’t have no other social media apart from Skype so please please don’t ask.

Better or worse

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

The only bit of advice I can give is Taunton is a town, not country.

Hope this helps

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By *inky-MinxWoman
over a year ago

Grantham


"Um am I missing the joke? "

Not sure, I couldn’t bring myself to read all that

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By *inky-MinxWoman
over a year ago

Grantham

OP it’s a profile not a bio and does not need to be as long as a book

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By *oobyHotwifeWoman
over a year ago

Thurrock

Do you have any photos on your profile or do you send any with a messsge

The reason I'm asking is most won't engage in any kind of conversation, let alone meet even for a social if they haven't seen a photo

Photos don't have to be naked, lots have clothed photos, heads cropped etc

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"Um am I missing the joke?

Not sure, I couldn’t bring myself to read all that "

It’s fine now I have changed it and taken a lot out my profile bio now says hi my name is roxy and I’m just looking for a 3some FFM

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By *wist my nipplesCouple
over a year ago

North East Scotland, mostly


"Um am I missing the joke?

Not sure, I couldn’t bring myself to read all that

It’s fine now I have changed it and taken a lot out my profile bio now says hi my name is roxy and I’m just looking for a 3some FFM "

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By *sm265Woman
over a year ago

Shangri-la


"Hello, the male half of this couple replied earlier; now for the female perspective. I know we’re too far away and therefore this wouldn’t apply to us anyway but you’ve asked for help so that’s what I’m offering.

In all honesty, as a woman and part of a couple, I’d be very put off by what you’ve written. I appreciate what you’ve said about people ignoring your preference, but you’re also going to lose people like me who do read the bios in full. It reads in quite a passive aggressive or, to be blunt, totally strange way. I think you can say it once and then at the bottom, ask anyone who has read the profile in full to put “women and couples” as the subject in their message so you can just delete any messages that don’t have that.

I don’t think you need to explain that you’re using a false name or why. Maybe just say “you can call me Roxy”. It’s implied that way but phrased a bit more nicely.

I agree with others about the sex toys. When I read that, it makes me think you’re a man posing as a woman. I don’t like reading about what people are going to do to me (bar my boyfriend) or what they’re going to use.

Definitely include your preferences. If you don’t shave, no problem, great to be honest. And that’s all I can remember for now. Hope it helps

Thank you, I am going to make some changes to the bio, the part where you say add the text at the bottom I have done that before and you can just tell that they haven’t read your (my) bio because they then ask what I’m interested in or what I’m looking for. Honestly I will be honest with everyone, when I had a short but sweet bio i felt like I was getting more mugged off by people like I will give an example I could start talking to a couples profile and then the woman in the relationship will then try and push her man to sleep with me and when I get uncomfortable or say I thought both of you meet up together that’s when I get told no he just wants to meet you. It’s kinda draining after a while, then you got the couples who are all talk no interest which I understand but when you have been messaging for ages that’s when I feel like it takes the piss. I’m going to write a fresh bio then see what yall think so far the only thing that seems to piss people off is the fact I add this () and keep saying women and couples "

It sounds very much like you may have been chatting to fake couples where it is just a male pretending to be a couple, that's usually the case when the supposed wife tries to get you to meet the husband alone (there is no wife, or she certainly doesn't know he is on Fab).

I agree with what others have said about the toys, big turn off, I wouldn't be comfortable with toys being used on me that weren't mine.

Ultimately it's your profile, there is no secret formula that magically gets replies, it just comes down to finding people who are looking for the same things as you and who read your profile and want to know more.

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By *DW1983Man
over a year ago

Aberdeen, Leeds, Sheffield


"Now on to why I’m on a swingers site basically...

[...]

Now on to the bit some of you (couples&women) ignore. ( I should really write it at the top so all of you (couples&women) can see)

Now...

[...]

Okay now on to what I look like because some people don’t like certain things or are shocked by certain parts of my body, so...

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So just to make things clearer for some people..."

I agree with some of the points above. As someone whose job involves a lot of proofreading, I'd say you have a lot of words that don't actually say or add anything. You could delete all of the above quotes without taking away any of the meaning or sense of what you're saying. It would still convey all the same information but be easier to read.

You don't need to tell us, for example, that you're about to tell us why you're on a swingers site. Telling us why is sufficient. Maybe start with a less wordy 'Why am I here?' if you want to be more conversational.

Likewise we know you're telling us what you look like so you don't need to introduce it. Nor that people like different things. Besides being obvious, that's why you're telling us and we're reading it, to see if there's a match.

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By *nake doctor 21Man
over a year ago

lanzarote

Be in control . You say what you want

What you like

What you look like .

You block people not them . And take the leap . Happy shagging

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

A totally honest opinion as you asked for one? We would go on to the next profile as this screams hard work to us.

It’s too long, gives us information we don’t need and gives off negative vibes.

Sorry OP.

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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago

Fact , most people do not read profiles , so pointless keep repeating the same lines , keep it short and to the point

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no


"Fact , most people do not read profiles , so pointless keep repeating the same lines , keep it short and to the point "

I have changed it, now it just says my name is roxy and I just want to meet people

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By *ustfortheforums OP   Woman
over a year ago

no

This is what I’m going to change my new bio into.

WHO AM I??

My name is roxy

WHERE AM I FROM/LIVE??

I live in Taunton

SOCIAL MEDIA:

None only Skype

WHAT IM LOOKING FOR??

A 3some and to get to know others

(You said keep it short)

Let’s see how many people send me a friend request ask for more pictures and ask for my number

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